|
|
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327
Campfire Outfitter
|
OP
Campfire Outfitter
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327 |
I was up waaaaay too early this morning. I have three novels in the oven, and the first is getting close to coming out. I've been editing heavily on it since a week ago Sunday. I know you guys usually like my stuff, so I wanted to run some stuff past you. Setup: The professor invites his young assistant on a deer hunting trip. They go to visit his old buddy, Merle. Merle's a bit of an eccentric.
We went back up to the house. Art got the grill fired up. While we were waiting, Merle brought a wind-up Victrola out onto the porch. He had doctored it so it would play LP records. After he had set the needle down on The Best of Buck Owens, he took a scoop fashioned from a gallon milk jug and dipped it into a garbage can of cracked corn, peanuts and sunflower seeds. This he flung out on the lawn. On the way back to the porch, he rang the dinner bell. The yard was almost instantly filled with squirrels, rabbits, and blue jays. The cat sat on the porch, completely hypnotized, as were we all. Just before the hotdogs came off the grill, a red-shouldered hawk swooped down and grabbed a chipmunk.
Question: Is this too obscure? BTW: I think I've found a way to work a visit with the Valkyries into Volume 2.
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: May 2005
Posts: 14,104
Campfire Outfitter
|
|
Campfire Outfitter
Joined: May 2005
Posts: 14,104 |
Obscure? No. Believable? Depends on the context. Relevant? Your call.
Ben
Some days it takes most of the day for me to do practically nothing...
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 22,274
Campfire Ranger
|
|
Campfire Ranger
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 22,274 |
sounds fine, especially the Valkyries part 
"...the designer of the .270 Ingwe cartridge!..."
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327
Campfire Outfitter
|
|
OP
Campfire Outfitter
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327 |
You guys ARE catching the reference, aren't you?
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: May 2009
Posts: 915
Campfire Regular
|
|
Campfire Regular
Joined: May 2009
Posts: 915 |
My natural skepticism reminds me it is fiction when the scoop made from a flimsy milk jug is stiff enough to scoop peanuts mixed in cracked corn.
Good story base.
Clinging to my God, and my guns!
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327
Campfire Outfitter
|
|
OP
Campfire Outfitter
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327 |
Good point. The milk jugs we get from the convenient stores are strong, but the ones from Krogers are too flimsy.
I'll make it a Clorox bottle.
Thanks.
Did anyone figure out the pop song reference?
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 73,096
Campfire Kahuna
|
|
Campfire Kahuna
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 73,096 |
I get it Shaman, and like it.
Time for a visit to the garden gate!
George Orwell was a Prophet, not a novelist. Read 1984 and then look around you!
Old cat turd!
"Some men just need killing." ~ Clay Allison.
I am too old to fight but I can still pull a trigger. ~ Me
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327
Campfire Outfitter
|
|
OP
Campfire Outfitter
Joined: Dec 2002
Posts: 12,327 |
I get it Shaman, and like it.
Time for a visit to the garden gate! I'll post a few more chapters up there today.
|
|
|
|
|
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 73,096
Campfire Kahuna
|
|
Campfire Kahuna
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 73,096 |
Damn place makes me change my password every time I log in after a couple days, other than that OK.
At least I got it figured out and don't have to bother you about it each time.
George Orwell was a Prophet, not a novelist. Read 1984 and then look around you!
Old cat turd!
"Some men just need killing." ~ Clay Allison.
I am too old to fight but I can still pull a trigger. ~ Me
|
|
|
|
|
75 members (6mmbrfan, 257_X_50, 808outdoors, 2500HD, 7mm_Loco, 257robertsimp, 9 invisible),
1,397
guests, and
807
robots. |
|
Key:
Admin,
Global Mod,
Mod
|
|
|
Forums81
Topics1,192,118
Posts18,483,505
Members73,966
| |
Most Online11,491
Jul 7th, 2023
|
|
|
|
